Untitled II
2010
19 readers wrote back
your writing style is sparse, but not too much. you use your words sparingly, as if each one costs you a price beyond currency. the result is very effective and straight forward. I cannot tell you my favorite lines because this whole piece works together, I am unable to let any line live on it's own. what a tremendous talent you possess.
the thoughts and dreams of a reluctant sleep mixed with a little despair and unknowing
this feels like saying life never changes for me. i keep having dreams and hopes...but somehow they get rained upon...and i end up waiting, silent again and again...hoping things can get better...and my life can match my dreams.
I love your style of writing, I like the mystery in trying the yearness that I feel when I read your lyrics. :)
A drifting, dreamish write of longing and looking for more... that hope that life has hidden treasures awaiting, even if in sleep... Such a visual work.
A Lovely abstract piece. You do have a way with words, don't you?
My forerunners hopes long for, my struggle; and my jumped mood, thinks too much. This was amazing!
very good work here, nice job. as thought-provoking as the previous one, maybe even better! now that's some vivid and surreal work! "A dream awaits, my slumber; and the wake mind, fears tomorrow." now those really were strong verses. awesome!
"Footprints in the sand, are stamped again; while the drops tugs;among, the same vessel." I just shot a verbal wad. I feel like you owe me dinner and dancing. Gotta expand and drop some spoken word on an unsuspecting word. I can hear all the big yells and stops all over this thing. Get a stage, if you havent already and light the fucking place on fire. Well done
again..this feels like your writing from the NOW...by that I mean you are able to capture the moment right now......this is good!...and I like it!....keep writing bro!
p.s im referring to: life is not what it seems...you dont need to say that. keep the tantalising mystery of your frame of mind evolving..its a great journey to go on!
i think you iterate too much here. you tell us what you want us to know by being direct and yet it is in your simplicity and directives (descriptions of emotions) in which we gauge that anyway. its good no doubt but less is more. you have all the intensity and feeling. it IS visible. i think you're worried it's not
Wow, beautiful write, obviously from a poet who knows his craft. Bravo!
I love your style and imagery, Vivek! So beautiful, so painful, and I think that anyone whose wrestled with feelings, existence and its meaning can connect with your writing. So very well-done.
I must say, you do have a flair for words. Your poems possess a melancholy feeling that is really touching..
your writing style is abtractly inticing. Your words cry pain and longing. Again your words deserve a title. I use to live my poems untitled and realize they just become numbers in a pile.
This is very beautifully written. I really like your way of writing poems. Great job. :)
This is interesting, and haunting in a good way. It's beautifully written and very descriptive. You captured the emotions nicely good job!
This was an usual way of writing, like you combined lots of poems or thoughts into one poem. Like when your asleep your subconscience floats from thought to thought of what went on that day. I do like it and this piece makes a person stop and think, what is to come when finally waking up. good job again!